Bonjour, aurez-vous la gentillesse de corriger cette courte lettre de motivation en anglais? Dear Mrs, I'm writing to apply for help you during peak tourist sea
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Bonjour, aurez-vous la gentillesse de corriger cette courte lettre de motivation en anglais?
Dear Mrs,
I'm writing to apply for help you during peak tourist season. My name is xx, I'm 15 years old and I'm student.
I'm interested in this job because this would be an enriching and instructive experience for me.
I'd love working with you; I'm very reliable and hard-working. I'm also sociable.
I've never worked in the tourist industry but I'm very keen and I can speak English, French, Turkish and Azerbaïjani.
Thank you for your time and attention. xx xxx
I look forward to hearing from you. 46 Titchfield St.
Yours sincerely, Ballybrack
Dublin 7
1 080 2568
Dear Mrs,
I'm writing to apply for help you during peak tourist season. My name is xx, I'm 15 years old and I'm student.
I'm interested in this job because this would be an enriching and instructive experience for me.
I'd love working with you; I'm very reliable and hard-working. I'm also sociable.
I've never worked in the tourist industry but I'm very keen and I can speak English, French, Turkish and Azerbaïjani.
Thank you for your time and attention. xx xxx
I look forward to hearing from you. 46 Titchfield St.
Yours sincerely, Ballybrack
Dublin 7
1 080 2568
1 Réponse
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1. Réponse Anonyme
Salut,
Je préfère que tu mettes dans la seconde ligne:
I'm applying for this job to provide you some help during the peak tourist season.
Et dans l'autre:
I've never worked in a tourist industry before, but I'm keen being part of it.
Et le reste tout est parfait.
Tu pourrais aussi réduire la répétition de '' I '' si possible.