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Bonsoir,

Pouvez vous svp me corriger mon texte en Anglais svp en utilisant des mots simples , vous pouvez formuler les phrases avec des phrases simples en Anglais , formuler autrement, modifier parce que les mots du texte sont plutôt compliqués...

Merci d'avance

Voici la consigne du texte :

Ecrire une lettre au producteur de votre série préférée.

1) Choisissez une série télévisée (ou une série de romans) que vous aimez particulièrement regarder ou lire.

2) Pensez à un revirement surprenant dans l'intrigue qui vous a pris par surprise - quelque chose à laquelle vous ne vous attendiez pas.
Ça peut l'être :

- La mort d'un personnage

- Un renversement de fortune

- Une relation étonnante

3) Organisez vos notes dans une lettre au producteur/auteur. Partagez vos sentiments avec lui ou elle.

4) Rédiger la version finale.

Voici le texte d'anglais :

Dear Mrs. Susie Lewis Lynn, Dear Mr. Glenn Eichler,

I am writing to tell you about "Daria", the series you are producing. I'm keen on this American animated serie TV and I like it very much. Moreover, I want to tell you that, despite being aired between 1997 and 2002 on the MTV network, and well before my birth, it stays, to me, still relevant. A true cult series !

"Daria" is a series I watched years ago but I still love it. I enjoyed the drawings as well as the story which is rather simple, realistic and interesting. A very ironical series, with sarcasm and critical humor that made me laugh a lot. I particularly enjoyed the main subject who is the daily life of a teenager, but the simplicity of the subject, allowed me to relate to characters.

Moreover, I really enjoyed the characters Daria Morgendorffer, the 17-year-old girl considered like the "anti-heroine" and her younger sister, Quinn Morgendorffer who is 14. These two characters were my favorites ones because of they opposite physics and personalities despite the fact that they come from the same family. Daria is a teenager with long brown hair. She is smart, cultured, a bit jaded. She likes to read, is found of pizzas, and tries to survive from her hell of high school in the United States. In addition, she does not have a behavior like teenagers of her age : she does not really smile and she is not very sociable. She is a sort of a misanthropic nature. Contrary to her, her sister has beautiful long red hair and she is very shallow and popular. Furthermore, she is frivolous and devotes all her energy to choosing her outfits with her friends from the Fashion Club. Very coquettish, she often goes on dates with boys.

But the event who surprised me the most, happened in the fifth season. In this season, Daria fell in love with Thomas Sloane Jr, a student who was Jane Lane 's best and only friend. Daria fell in love with this boy even if she despises others, takes a down-to-earth approach and is often negative about the things that surrounds her and about life in general. It amazed me so much ! I wish I could tell you that Daria is an original character, since she does not possess any of the usual characteristics of a heroine. I’d rather call her an anti-heroine by the way. Indeed, she has several flaws because her behavior does not correspond to the ideal traditional heroine.

I am so glad that MTV Studios developed since 2018, the "Reboot" of your famous series, under the title of Daria and Jodie.

I would like to say that I am very happy to write you. This is also the occasion for me to thank you, to share my opinion about your series, which was a real success.  



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  • Hey, voici ton texte corrigé !!!

    - Dear Mrs. Susie Lewis Lynn, Dear Mr. Glenn Eichler,

    I am writing to tell you about “Daria”, the series you are producing. I'm keen on this American animated series TV and I like it very much. Moreover, I want to tell you that, despite being aired between 1997 and 2002 on the MTV network, and well before my birth, it stays, to me, still relevant. A true cult series!

    “Daria” is a series I watched years ago but I still love it. I enjoyed the drawings as well as the story which is rather simple, realistic and interesting. A very ironical series, with sarcasm and critical humor that made me laugh a lot. I particularly enjoyed the main subject who is the daily life of a teenager, but the simplicity of the subject, allowed me to relate to characters.

    Moreover, I really enjoyed the characters Daria Morgendorffer, the 17-year-old girl considered like the “anti-heroine” and her younger sister, Quinn Morgendorffer who is 14. These two characters were my favorites ones because of their opposite physics and personalities despite the fact that they come from the same family. Daria is a teenager with long brown hair. She is smart, cultured, a bit jaded. She likes to read, is found of pizzas, and tries to survive from her hell of high school in the United States. In addition, she does not have behavior like teenagers of her age: she does not really smile, and she is not very sociable. She is a sort of misanthropic nature. Contrary to her, her sister has beautiful long red hair, and she is very shallow and popular. Furthermore, she is frivolous and devotes all her energy to choosing her outfits with her friends from the Fashion Club. Very coquettish, she often goes on dates with boys.

    But the event who surprised me the most happened in the fifth season. In this season, Daria fell in love with Thomas Sloane Jr, a student who was Jane Lane's best and only friend. Daria fell in love with this boy even if she despises others, takes a down-to-earth approach and is often negative about the things that surround her and about life in general. It amazed me so much ! I wish I could tell you that Daria is an original character since she does not possess any of the usual characteristics of a heroine. I’d rather call her an anti-heroine by the way. Indeed, she has several flaws because her behavior does not correspond to the ideal traditional heroine.

    I am so glad that MTV Studios developed since 2018, the “Reboot” of your famous series, under the title of Daria and Jodie.

    I would like to say that I am very happy to write to you. This is also the occasion for me to thank you, to share my opinion about your series, which was a real success.

    Voilaaaa ;)

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